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DOL 3

Original 1: mr. palonia says that there are some athletes who are on this here team that believe noone should not have any practice Revised 1: Mr. Palonia said that there are some athletes on this team that believe everyone should practice. Sentence 2: to ensure success they should require those in the project the ones doing the experiment too have new lab equipment Revised 2: To ensure success they should require those in the project - the ones doing the experiment - to have new lab equipments.

DOL 4

Original 1: darnel dont have no reason too question them instructions but he does want a explanation for this here exam Revised 1: Darnel doesn't have a reason to question the instructions, but he does want an explanation for this exam. Original 2: me and olga went downtown we went to buy new notebooks we need them for class we also need them for our long term project Revised 2: Olga and I went downtown to buy the new notebooks that we need for class and our long term project.

DOL 5

Original 1: yes terri won the game but at the time we dont know that she had Revised 1: Yes, Terri won the game - but at that time we didn't know that she had. Original 2: the affect of the program cancellation which bothered most of we members was to end the project before we can finish Revised 2: The effect of the program cancellation, which bothered most of us members, was that the project was ended before we could finish.

DOL 6

Original 1: because you should of heard their voice when i told them how there vacaion time would be effected Revised 1: Because you should have heard their voices when I told them how their vacation time would be affected. Original 2: irregardless of what grandpa says itll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration Revised 2: Regardless of what Grandpa says, it'll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration.

DOL 9

Sentence 1: ms perez the science teacher stated within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity did because it changed the world

Sentence 2: yesterday mom told us that whomever borrows her new sweater have to take it to the cleaners

DOL 10

Sentence 1: our Social Studies teacher asked us who have her as a teacher to write reports ont he south she said it was to be an emphasis on african americans

Sentence 2: well i think someones mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert

DOL 11

Original 1: my oldest sister whose going to live in the new east town apartments wants youre help moving in tonite Revised 1: My oldest sister, who's going to live in the new East Town apartments, wants your help moving in tonight.

Original 2: at the end of her speech amanda said if you need farther informations dont hesitate to ask me for more information Revised 2: At the end of her speech, Amanda said "If you need further information dont hesitate to ask me for more information."

DOL 12

Original 1:having read the novel the man in the iron mask i wanna find out more about the french revolution Revised 1: Having read the novel "The Man in the Iron Mask", I want to find out more about the French Revolution.

Sentence 2: there were to many things to do i couldnt finish my homework practicing my soccer skills or go to my friends concert Revised 2: Because there were too many things to do, I couldn't finish my homework, practice my soccer skills, or go to my friends concert.

DOL 13

Original 1: mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which was assigned to germany after world war 2 helped maintain peace in that there country Revised 1: Mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which were assigned to Germany after World War 2 helped to maintain peace in the country.

Original 2: having finished her foreign exchange trip a plane ticket was requested to the united states at the end of her foreign exchange trip Revised 2: Having finished her foreign exchange trip, she requested a plane ticket to the United States at its end.

DOL 15

Original 1: he was incidentally unable to attend hour 15th high-school reunion he just couldn't make it because he lives too far away Revised 1: Incidentally, he was unable to attend our 15th high school reunion because he lives too far away.

Original 2: it says that irregardless of the effect of poor weather the shakespearean play romeo and juliet will be sold out Revised 2: It says that regardless of the poor weather, the Shakespearean play, Romeo and Juliet, will be sold out.

DOL 17

Sentence 1: does caroline know weather raul might of come to the class council meeting at 600pm or was he off of student government

Sentence 2: there are 3 qualities that are existing that give this field hockey team the better advantage in the league a terrific goalie a great offense and a winning spirit

DOL 20

Sentence 1: yes their going to welcome whomever want to come to the rally weather democrat or republican Revised 1: Yes, they're going to welcome anyone who wants to come to the rally, whether democrat or republican.

Sentence 2: this car a 1966 mustang is now extremely valuable irregardless of what he tv show classic cars reports Revised 2: This car, a 1966 mustang, is now extremely valuable, regardless of what the TV show Classic Cars reports.