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DOL 25

Sentence 1: the titanic, believed to be unsinkable, carried more then 1,500 people to there graves. Corrected: The titanic carried more than 1,500 people to their graves; it was believed to be unsinkable. Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land Corrected: Because the student teacher arrives next week, it is necessary that we need to finish reading Eliot's long poem, __The Waste Land__.

DOL 26

Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly Corrected: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the __Atlantic Monthly__, a renowned magazine. Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library Corrected: "I am very eager to read the French novel __The Plague__," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library,"

DOL 27

Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations Corrected: Everyone in this grade is responsible for thsi year's dance, therefore, we must all raise funds for the decorations. Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner Corrected: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.

DOL 28

Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet Corrected: I reme Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing

DOL 29

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified

DOL 33

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library Corrected: When are these books due, Hans? Should I bring them to the library? Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified Corrected: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.

DOL 34

Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain Correction: Much depends on the weather; you are affected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain. Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier Correction: While half the class uses the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian Magazines that are different from the ones we used earlier.

DOL 35

Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft Corrected: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because no one had a copy of Marie's draft. Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming Corrected: My mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.

DOL 36

Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated Corrected: "There are some athletes who rarely but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal stated. Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think Corrected:The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for me and my mom.

DOL 37

Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)

ms paula jeffers campton paper company 18376 river drive minneaplois mn dear ms jeffers

DOL 38

Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy Corrected: The United States Constitution sets out certain individual rights that we are all privileged to enjoy. Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew Corrected: We have neither the time nor the ability to practice the play because so many actors caught the flu.

DOL 39

Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner Corrected: To be allowed to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help mom fix dinner. Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29 Corrected: Mr. Corazzini who can never start his car, took the bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.

DOL 40

Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico Corrected: Luisa bought an antique pitcher in Mexico for her cousin from Atlanta. Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry Corrected: Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.

DOL 41 Sentence 1: park rangers which work in large forests periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth Corrected: Park rangers, who work in large factories, periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth. Sentence 2: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs Corrected: After the discovery of penicillia, many miracle drugs appeared; ironically, though, forty years have passed and bacteria are becoming more resistant to drugs.

DOL 42

Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination Corrected: Differences among the eight camp counselors, caused a change in the field trip's destination. Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests Corrected: First, Felicia planned the party; second, decided on decorations; third, she invited special guests

DOL 43

Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club

Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found