MLDOLQ2+Hannah

DOL 25

Sentence 1:
 * original** the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable
 * corrected** The Titanic, once believed to be unsinkable, carried more than 1,500 people to their graves.

Sentence 2:
 * original** the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land
 * corrected** Because the student teacher arrives next week, it is necessary to finish reading Eliot's long poem, __The Waste Land__.

DOL 26

Sentence 1:
 * original** a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly
 * corrected** Many well known writers submit articles and stories to __The Atlantic Monthly__, a renowned magazine.

Sentence 2:
 * original** i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library
 * corrected** "I am very eager to read the French novel __The Plague__," Carmen said, "But it is not in our library."

DOL 27

Sentence 1:
 * original** everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations
 * corrected** Everyone in this grade is responsible for this year's dance; therefore, we all must raise funds for the decorations.

Sentence 2:
 * original** having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner
 * corrected** Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.

DOL 28

Sentence 1:
 * original** i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet
 * corrected** I remember when my neighbor set up a huge telescope, the largest I had ever seen, to observe Halley's Comet.

Sentence 2:
 * original** ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing
 * corrected** Ms. Masayo asked, "Do you feel all right now, Walter, or do you want to go skiing?"

DOL 29-32 SKIP

DOL 33

Sentence 1:
 * original** when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
 * corrected** "When are these books due? Hans, should I bring them to the library?"

Sentence 2:
 * original** after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified
 * corrected** After The Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.

DOL 34

Sentence 1:
 * original** much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain
 * corrected** Much depends on whether you are affected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.

Sentence 2:
 * original** while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier
 * corrected** While half the class use the internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian magazine that is different from the ones we used earlier.

DOL 35

Sentence 1:
 * original** oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft
 * corrected** Oh, we haven't finished our group book report, because everyone doesn't have a copy of Marie's draft.

Sentence 2:
 * original** since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming
 * corrected** My mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, liking in Montana, and Caping in Wyoming.

DOL 36

Sentence 1:
 * original** there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated
 * corrected** "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal stated.

Sentence 2:
 * original** the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think
 * corrected** The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for me and my mom.

DOL 37

Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain) ms paula jeffers campton paper company 18376 river drive minneaplois mn dear ms jeffers Ms. Paula Jeffers Campton Paper Company 18376 River Drive Minneaplois, Mn. Dear Ms. Jeffers,
 * original**
 * corrected**

DOL 38

Sentence 1:
 * original** because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy
 * corrected** The United States Constitution sets out certain individual rights we are all privileged to enjoy.

Sentence 2:
 * original** we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew
 * corrected** We have neither the time nor the ability to practice the play because we lost so many actors to the flu.

DOL 39

Sentence 1:
 * original** to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner
 * corrected** To be allowed to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help mom fix dinner.

Sentence 2:
 * original** mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29
 * corrected** Mr. Corazzini who can never start his car took the bus to Dulles airport on Tuesday, October 29.

DOL 40

Sentence 1:
 * original** luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico
 * corrected** Luisa bought an antique pitcher in Mexico for her cousin who is in Atlanta.

Sentence 2:
 * original** oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry
 * corrected** Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you do not have a lot of things to carry.

DOL 41

Sentence 1:
 * original** park rangers who works in large forests periodically set fire to mark leads to encourage new growth
 * corrected** Park Rangers, who work in large forests, periodically set fire to marked leads to encourage new growth.

Sentence 2:
 * original** after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs
 * corrected** After the discovery of penicillin, many miracle drugs appeared; though, ironically, forty years later bacteria are becoming more resistant to drugs.

DOL 42

Sentence 1:
 * original** because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination
 * corrected** Differences between the eight camp counselors caused a change in the field trip's destination.

Sentence 2:
 * original** first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests
 * corrected** First, Felicia planned the party; second, she decided on decorations; third, she invited special guests.

DOL 43

Sentence 1:
 * original** do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club
 * corrected** Does Juan and David's ownership of this sailboat entitle them to membership in the Winthrop Beach Yacht Club?

Sentence 2:
 * original** the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found
 * corrected** The article "In Search of Spanish Galleons" in the book __Shipwrecks__ was written by Kiber and Rotondi, who believe the gallleons will be found.

DOL 44

Sentence 1:
 * original** neither rasheed or larry dont want their teams loss to suggest that team members didnt play good
 * corrected** Neither Rasheed nor Larry doesn't want his team loss to suggest that team member didn't play well.

Sentence 2:
 * original** mr. Kato explained that because the rule does not effect the entire school but only individual students as a result of that rule the student handbook was checked
 * corrected** Mr. Kato explained that the rule dos not affect the entire school,only individual students according to the handbook rule.