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DOL 25

Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable

Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land

Corrected:

Sentence 1: The Titanic, once believed to be unsinkable, carried more than 1,500 people to their graves.

Sentence 2: Because student teacher arrives next week, it is necessary to finish reading Eliot's long poem, __The Waste Land__.

DOL 26

Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly

Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library

Corrected:

Sentence 1: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the __Atlantic Monthly__, a renowned magazine.

Sentence 2: "I am very eager to read the French novel, __The Plague__," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library."

DOL 27

Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations

Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner

Corrected:

Sentence 1: Everyone in this grade is responsible for this year's dance; therefore, we all must raise funds for the decorations.

Sentence 2: Having worked for eight hours, I need to settle down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.

DOL 28

Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet

Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing

Corrected:

Sentence 1: I remember when my neighbor set up a huge telescope; the largest I have ever seen to observe Halley's Comet.

Sentence 2: Ms. Masayo asked, "Do you feel all right now, Walter, or do you want to go skiing?"

DOL 29-32 SKIP

DOL 33

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified

Corrected:

Sentence 1: "When are these books due? Hans, should I bring them to the library?"

Sentence 2: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.

DOL 34

Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain

Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier

Corrected:

Sentence 1: Much depends on whether you're affected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.

Sentence 2: While half the class uses the Internet, the rest will study the __Smithsonian__ magazines that are different than the ones we used.

DOL 35

Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft

Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming

Corrected:

Sentence 1: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because everyone doesn't have a copy of Marie's draft.

Sentence 2: My mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.

DOL 36

Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated

Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think

Corrected:

Sentence 1: "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal, stated.

Sentence 2: The World Series, although often exciting, is sometimes too slow paced for me and my mom.

DOL 37

Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)

ms paula jeffers campton paper company 18376 river drive minneaplois mn dear ms jeffers

Corrected:

Sentence 1:

Ms. Paula Jeffers Campton Paper Company 18376 River Drive Minneapolis, MN Dear Ms. Jeffers,

DOL 38

Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy

Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew

Corrected:

Sentence 1: The United States Constitution sets out certain individual rights that we are all privileged to enjoy.

Sentence 2: We have neither the time nor the ability to practice the play because we lost so many actors to the flu.

DOL 39

Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner

Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29

Corrected:

Sentence 1: To be allowed to go to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help my mom fix dinner.

Sentence 2: Mr. Corazzini who can never start his car took the bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.

DOL 40

Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico

Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry

Corrected:

Sentence 1: Luisa bought an antique pitcher in Mexico for her cousin in Atlanta.

Sentence 2: Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.

DOL 41

Sentence 1: park rangers who works in large forests periodically set fire to mark lands to encourage new growth

Sentence 2: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs

Corrected:

Sentence 1: Park Rangers, who work in large forests, periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth.

Sentence 2: After the discovery of penicillin, many miracle drugs appeared; ironically, though, forty years later bacteria are becoming more resistant to drugs.

DOL 42

Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination

Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests

Corrected:

Sentence 1: Differences between the eight camp counselors caused a change in the field trip's guests.

Sentence 2: First, Felicia planned the party; second, she decided on decorations; third, she invited special guests.

DOL 43

Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club

Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found

Corrected:

Sentence 1: Do Juan and David's ownership of this sailboat entitle them to membership in the Winthrop Beach Yacht Club?

Sentence 2: The article "In Search of Spanish Galleons" in the book __Shipwrecks__ was written by Kiber and Rotondi who believe the galleons will be found.