MLDOLQ2+Joseph

DOL 25

Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable

Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land

Fixed: 1. The Titanic, once believed to be unsinkable, carried more than 1,500 people to their graves. 2. Because the student teacher arrives next week, it is necessary to finish reading Eliot's long poem, __The Waste Land__.

DOL 26

Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly

Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library

Fixed: 1. Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the __Atlantic Monthlhy__, a renowned magazine. 2. "I am very eager to read the French novel __The Plague__," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library."

DOL 27

Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations

Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner

Fixed: 1. Everyone in this grade is responsible for this year's dance; therefore, we must all raise funds for the decorations. 2. Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.

DOL 28

Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet

Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing

Fixed: 1. I remember when my neighbor set up a huge telescope;

DOL 29

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified

DOL 33

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified

Fixed: 1. When are these books due? Hans, should I bring them to the library? 2. After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.

DOL 34

Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain

Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier

Fixed: 1. Much depends on whether you're affected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain. 2. While half the class uses the internet, the rest studies the __Smithsonian__ magazines that are different from the ones we used earlier.

DOL 35

Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft

Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming

Fixed: 1. Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because everyone doesn''t have a copy of Marie's draft. 2. My mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.

DOL 36

Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated

Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think

Fixed: 1. "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal, stated. 2. The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for me and my mom.

DOL 37

Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)

ms paula jeffers campton paper company 18376 river drive minneaplois mn dear ms jeffers

Fixed: 1. Ms. Paula Jeffers Campton Paper Company 18376 River Drive Minneupolis, MN Dear Ms. Jeffers,

DOL 38

Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy

Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew

Fixed: 1. The United States Constitution sets out certain individual rights we are privileged to enjoy. 2. We have neither the time nor the ability to practice the play because we lost so many actors to the flu.

DOL 39

Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner

Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29

Fixed: 1. I had to finish m science project, clean my room, and help my mom fix dinner to be allowed to go to the party. 2. Mr. Corazzini, who could never start his car, took the bus to the Dulles airport on Tuesday, October 29.

DOL 40

Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico

Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry

Fixed: 1. Luisa bought an antique pitcher in Mexico for her cousin in Atlanta. 2. Oscar, please set these books down on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.

DOL 41

Sentence 1: park rangers who works in large forests periodically set fire to mark lands to encourage new growth Sentence 2: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs.

Fixed: 1. Park rangers, who work in large forests, periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth. 2. After the discovery of penicillin, many miracle drugs appeared; though, ironically, forty years later bacteria are more resistant to drugs.

DOL 42

Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination

Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests

Fixed: 1. The differences between the eight camp counselors caused a change in the field trip destination. 2. First, Felicia planned the party; second, she decided on decorations; third, she invited special guests.

DOL 43

Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club

Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found

Fixed: 1. Does Juan and David's ownership of this sailboat entitle them to memeberships in the Winthrop Beach Yacht Club? 2. The article "In Search of Spanish Galleons" in t he book __Shipwrecks__ was written by Kiber and Rotondi who believe the galleons will be found.