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Wed. Aug. 19 2009 (Class 3)

Original 1. mr. palonia says that there are some athletes who are on this here team that believe noone should not have any practice Edited 1. Mr. Palonia says that there are some athletes on the team who believe everybody should practice.

Original 2. to ensure success they should require those in the project the ones doing the experiment too have new lab equipment Edited 2. To ensure success, they should require those doing the experiment for the project to have new lab equipment.

Thurs. Aug. 20 2009 (Class 4)

Original 1. darnel dont have no reason too question them instructions but he does want a explanation for this here exam Edited 1. Darnel doesn't have any reason to question the instructions, but he still wants an explanation for this exam.

Original 2. me and olga went downtown we went to buy new notebooks we need them for class we also need them for our long term project Edited 2. Olga and I went downstairs to buy new notebooks for our long term project in class.

Mon. Aug. 24 2009 (Class 5)

Original 1. yes terri won the game but at the time we dont know that she had Edited 1. Yes, Terri won the game, but we didn't know she had at the time.

Original 2. the affect of the program cancellation which bothered most of we members was to end the project before we can finish Edited 2. The effect of the program's cancellation that bothered most of us members was the end of the project before we could finish.

Tues. Aug. 26, 2009 (Class 6)

Original 1. because you should of heard their voice when i told them how there vacaion time would be effected Edited You should have heard their voices when I told them how their vacation time would be affected.

Original 2. irregardless of what grandpa says itll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration Edited 2. Regardless of what Grandpa says, it'll be all right to bring a friend to the family celebration.

Fri. Aug. 28, 2009 (Class 7)

Original 1. rob commentd that us neighbors has got to be welcoming to children outside of our neighborhood he mentioned to us Edited 1. Rob commented that our neighbors should be welcoming to children from outside our neighborhood.

Original 2. neither ben or me because we hae not read the assignment knew the definition of the word chide Edited 2. Neither Ben nor I know the definition of the word "chide", because we have not read the assignment.

Mon. 31, 2009 (Class 8)

Original 1. marcus a serious athlete tries very hard im sure he will see alot of action in todays game Edited 1. Marcus, a serious athlete, tries very hard; I'm sure he will see a lot of action in today's game.

Original 2. the reace between the three relay teams is close none of the 3 however are giving up hope of winning Edited 2. The race between the three relay teams is close; none of the three, however, are giving up hope of winning.

Wed. Sept. 2, 2009 (Class 9)

Original 1. ms perez the science teacher stated within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity did because it changed the world Edited 1. Ms. Perez, the science teacher, stated, "Within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity."

Original 2. yesterday mom told us that whomever borrows her new sweater have to take it to the cleaners Edited 2. Yesterday, Mom told us that whoever borrows her new sweater has to take it to the cleaners.

Fri. Sept. 4, 2009 (Class 10)

Original 1. our Social Studies teacher asked us who have her as a teacher to write reports ont he south she said it was to be an emphasis on african americans Edited 1. Our Social Studies teacher asked us to write a report on the South with an emphasis on African Americans.

Original 2. well i think someones mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert Edited 2. Well, I think someone's mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert.

Tues. Sept. 8 (Class 11)

Original 1. my oldest sister whose going to live in the new east town apartments wants youre help moving in tonite Edited 1. My oldest sister, who's going to live in the new East Town apartments, wants your help moving in tonight.

Original 2. at the end of her speech amanda said if you need farther informations dont hesitate to ask me for more information Edited 2. At the end of her speech, Amanda said, "If you need further information, don't hesitate to ask me."

Wed. Sept. 9 (Class 12)

Original 1. having read the novel the man in the iron mask i wanna find out more about the french revolution Edited 1. Having read the novel, __The Man in the Iron Mask__, I want to find out more about the French Revolution.

Original 2. there were to many things to do i couldnt finish my homework practicing my soccer skills or go to my friends concert Edited 2. There were too many things to do; I couldn't finish my homework, practice my soccer skills, or go to my friend's concert.

Fri. Sept. 11 (Class 13)

Original 1. mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which was assigned to germany after world war 2 helped maintain peace in that there country Edited 1. Mr. Guarino told us that the 24th Corps., which was assigned to Germany after World War II, helped maintain peace in that country.

Original 2. having finished her foreign exchange trip a plane ticket was requested to the united states at the end of her foreign exchange trip Edited 2. Having finished her foreign exchange trip, a plane ticket to the United States was requested.

Tues. Sept. 15 (Class 14)

Original 1. i reviewed the book real good i received a good grade on the report said Sonia Edited 1. "I reviewed the book really well; I received a good grade on the report," said Sonia.

Original 2. although we had 25 inches of show last Winter the bushes appear to be alright pedro noted Edited 2. "Although we had twenty-five inches of snow last winter, the bushes appear to be alright," Pedro noted.

Thurs. Sept. 17 (Class 15)

Original 1. he was incidentally unable to attend hour 15th high-school reunion he just couldn't make it because he lives too far away Edited 1. He was, incidentally, unable to attend our fifteenth high school reunion because he lives too far away.

Original 2. it says that irregardless of the effect of poor weather the shakespearean play romeo and juliet will be sold out Edited 2. It says that, regardless of the effect of the poor weather, the Shakespearean play //Romeo and Juliet// will be sold out.

Fri. Sept. 18 (Class 16)

Original 1. you should of followed three steps first open the hood secondly checking the level and lastly add more oil Edited 1. You should have followed three steps: first, open the hood; second, check the level; and last, add more oil.

Original 2. although my dog is different than yours we wont have no problem walking them to together Edited 2. Although my dog is different from yours, we won't have a problem walking them together.

Mon. Sept. 22 (Class 17)

Original 1. does caroline know weather raul might of come to the class council meeting at 600pm or was he off of student government Edited 1. Does Caroline know whether Raul might have come to the class council meeting at 6:00 P.M., or if he was off at student government?

Original 2. there are 3 qualities that are existing that give this field hockey team the better advantage in the league a terrific goalie a great offense and a winning spirit Edited 2. There are three qualities that give this field hockey team the advantage in the league: a terrific goalie, a great offense, and a winning spirit.

Thurs. Sept. 24 (Class 18)

Original 1. walking quiet along the road it was impossible to see that car that was speeding Edited 1. Walking quietly along the road, it was impossible for me to see the car speeding.

Original 2. after the race begins delia take these here medals to the track club at the school located East of herea winning spirit Edited 2. After the race begins, Delia, take these medals to the track club at the school located east of here.

Mon. Oct. 5 (Class 19)

Original 1. nothing could be farther from the truth mr perez stated than your comments Edited 1. "Nothing could be farther from the truth," Mr. Perez stated, "than your comments."

Original 2. she was quite young no more than 26 when she earned her doctorate consequently she began her career early Edited 2. She was quite young, no more than twenty-six, when she earned her doctorate. Consequently, she began her career early.

Tues. Oct. 6 (Class 20)

Original 1. yes their going to welcome whomever want to come to the rally weather democrat or republican Edited 1. Yes, they're going to welcome whoever wants to come to the rally, whether Democrat or Republican.

Original 2. this car a 1966 mustang is now extremely valuable irregardless of what he tv show classic cars reports Edited 2. This car, a 1966 Mustang, is now extremely valuable, regardless of what the TV show Classic Cars reports.

Thurs. Oct. 8 (Class 21)

Original 1. because it snowed heavy last night so its alright if noone comes to basketball practice because of all the snow Edited 1. Because it snowed heavily last night, it's alright if no one comes to basketball practice.

Original 2. they mentioned i believe that on january 2 2000 this here building was seventy five years old. Edited 2. They mentioned, I believe, that on January 2, 2000, this building was seventy-five years old.

Fri. Oct. 12 (Class 22)

Original 1. follow some simple rules and youll succeed listen in class doing your homework and learn as much as possible Edited 1. Follow some simple rules and you'll succeed: listen in class, do your homework, and learn as much as possible.

Original 2. in order to interest larry his role in the play has got to be made more challenging martina stated Edited 2. "In order to interest Larry, his role in the play has to be made more challenging," Martina stated.