MLDOLQ2+Deborah

Daily Oral Language


 * DOL 25**

Original:Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable Changed: The Titanic carried more than 1,500 people to their graves; it was believed to be unsinkable.

Orignal:Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land Changed: Because the student teacher arrives next week, we need to finish reading Eliot's long poem __The Waste Land.__


 * DOL 26**

Original:Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly Changed: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the //Atlantic Monthly//, a renowned magazine.

Original:Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library Changed: "I am very eager to read the French novel __The Plague__," Carmen said "but it's not in our library."


 * DOL 27**

Original:Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations Changed: Everyone in this grade are responsible for this year's dance; therefore, we must all raise funds for the decoration.

Original:Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner Changed: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.


 * DOL 28**

Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet

Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing


 * DOL 29**

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified


 * DOL 29-32 SKIP**


 * DOL 33**

Original:Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library Changed: "When are these books due Hans? Should I take them to the library?"

Original:Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified Changed: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.


 * DOL 34**

Original:Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain Changed: Much depends on wheter you're effected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.

Original:Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier Changed: While half the class used the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian magazines that are different from the ones we used earlier.


 * DOL 35**

Original:Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft Changed: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because noone had a copy of Marie's draft.

Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming Changed: My mum likes canoeing on the YellowStone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.


 * DOL 36**

Original:Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated Changed: "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice." Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal, stated.

Original:Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think Changed: The World Series, although often exciting, is sometimes too slow paced for me and my mom.

Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain) Original: ms paula jeffers campton paper company 18376 river drive minneaplois mn dear ms jeffers
 * DOL 37**

Changed: Ms. Paula Jeffers Campton Paper Company 18376 River Drive Minneapolis MN

Dear Ms. Jeffers.


 * DOL 38**

Original:Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy Changed: The Unites States Constitution sets out certain individual rights that we are all privileged to enjoy.

Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew Changed: We don't have the time nor the ability to practice the play because we lost so many actors to the flu.


 * DOL 39**

Original:Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner Changed: To be allowed to go to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help mum fix dinner.

Original:Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29 Changed: Mr. Corazzini, who can never start his car, took the bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.


 * DOL 40**

Original:Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico Changed: Luisa bought an antique pitcher from Mexico, for her cousin who is in Atlanta.

Original:Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry Changed: Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.

Original: park rangers who works in large forats periodically set fir to marked lands to encourage new growth Changed: Park rangers, who work in large forests, periodically set fire to lands to encourage new growth.
 * DOL 41**

Original: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically through 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs Changed: After the discovery of penicillin, many miracle drugs appeared; ironically, though, forty years have past and bacteria are becoming more resistant to drugs.

Original: Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination Changed: Differences among the eight camps counselors caused a change in the field trip's destination.
 * DOL 42**

Original:Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests Changed: First, Felicia planned the party, secondly, decided on decoration, and third, invited special guests.


 * DOL 43**

Original:Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club Changed: Does Juan and David's ownership of this sailboat entitle them two memberships in the Winthrop Beach Yacht Club?

Original:Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found Changed: The article, in serach of Spanish Galleons

DOL 44

Sentence 1: neither rasheed or larry dont want their teams loss to suggest that team members didnt play good

Sentence 2: mr. Kato explained that because the rule does not effect the entire school but only individual students as a result of that rule the student handbook was checked