MLDOLQ2+Andrew


 * DOL 25**

Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable //Corrected 1: The Titanic carried more than 1,500 people to their graves; it was believed to be unsinkable.// Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land //Corrected 2: Because the student teacher arrives next week, it is necessary that we need to finish reading Eliot's long poem,// __//The Waste//__//.//


 * DOL 26**

Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly //Corrected 1: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the// __//Atlantic Monthly//__//, a renowned magazine.// Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library //Corrected 2: "I am very eager French novel// __//The Plague//__//," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library."//


 * DOL 27**

Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations //Corrected 1: Everyone in this grade is responsible for this year's dance; therefore, we all must raise funds for the decorations.// Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner //Corrected 2: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music. and enjoy a good dinner.//


 * DOL 28**

Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet //Corrected Sentence 1: I remember when my neighbor set up a huge telescope that was the largest I had ever seen// Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing //Corrected Sentence 2: Ms. Masayo asked, "Do you feel alright now, Walter, or do you not want to go skiing?"//


 * DOL 33**

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library //Corrected Sentence 1: When are these books due, Hans" should I bring them to the library?// Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified //Corrected Sentence 2: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.//


 * DOL 34**

Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain //Corrected Sentence 1: Much depends on whether you're affected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.// Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier //Corrected Sentence 2: While half the class uses the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian Magazines that are different from the ones we used earlier.//


 * DOL 35**

Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft //Corrected Sentence 1: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because no one had a copy of Marie's draft.// Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming //Corrected Sentence 2: My mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana and camping in Wyoming.//


 * DOL 36**

Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated //Corrected Sentence 1: "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal, stated.// Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think //Corrected Sentence 2: The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for my mom and me.//


 * DOL 37**

Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)

ms paula jeffers campton paper company 18376 river drive minneaplois mn dear ms jeffers

//Corrected Sentence 1:

Ms. Paula Jeffers Campton Paper Company 18376 River Drive Minneapolis, Mn

Dear Ms. Jeffers,//

DOL 38

Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy

Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew

DOL 39

Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner

Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29

DOL 40

Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico

Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry

DOL 41

Sentence 1: park rangers who words in large forests periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth

Sentence 2: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years later bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs

DOL 42 (G still needs)

Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination

Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests

DOL 43 (D still needs)

Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club

Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found

DOL 44

Sentence 1: neither rasheed or larry dont want their teams loss to suggest that team members didnt play good

Sentence 2: mr. Kato explained that because the rule does not effect the entire school but only individual students as a result of that rule the student handbook was checked