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DOL 25

Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable

Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land

correct 1: The Titanic, believed to be unsinkable, carried more than 1,500 people to their graves.

correct 2: Because the student teacher arrives next week, we should finish reading Eliot's long poem, //The Waste Land//.

DOL 26

Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly

Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library

correct 1: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the //Atlantic Monthly//, a renowned magazine.

correct 2: "I am very eager to read the French novel //The Plague//," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library."

DOL 27

Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations

Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner

correct 1: Everyone in this grade is responsible for this year's dance; therefore, we must all raise funds for the decorations.

correct 2: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.

DOL 28

Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet

Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing

DOL 29

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified

DOL 29-32 SKIP

DOL 33

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified

correct 1: When are these books due Hans? Should I bring them to the library?

correct 2: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.

DOL 34

Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain

Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier

correct 1: Much depends on whether you're affected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.

correct 2: While half the class use the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian Magazines that are different from the ones we used earlier.

DOL 35

Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft

Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming

correct 1: Oh, we haven't got finished with our group book report because no one had a copy of Marie's Draft.

correct 2: My Mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.

DOL 36

Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated

Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think

correct 1: "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal, stated.

correct 2: The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for me and my Mom.

DOL 37

Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)

ms paula jeffers campton paper company 18376 river drive minneaplois mn dear ms jeffers

correct 1:

Ms. Paula Jeffers Campton Paper Company 18376 River Drive Minneapolis, MN Dear, Ms. Jeffers

DOL 38

Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy

Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew

correct 1: Because the United States Constitutions sits out certain individual rights, we is all privileged to enjoy.

correct 2: We haven't neither the time nor the ability to practice the play because we lost so many actors to the flow.

DOL 39

Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner

Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29

correct 1: To be allowed to go to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help my Mom fix dinner.

correct 2: Mr. Corazzini, who can't never start his car, took bus to Dulles airport on Tuesday, October 29th.

DOL 40

Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico

Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry

correct 1: Luisa bought an antique pitcher in Mexico for her cousin from Atlanta.

correct 2: Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.

DOL 41

Sentence 1: park rangers who works in large forests periodically set fire to marked land to encourage new growth

Sentence 2: after the discovery of penicillia very many miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs

correct 1: Park rangers, who works in large forests, periodically set fire to marked land to encourage new growth.

correct 2: After the discovery of penicillin, many miracle drugs appeared; ironically, forty years have passed, and bacteria are becoming more resistant to drugs.

DOL 42

Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination

Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations third she invited special guests

correct 1: Differences between the eight camp counselors caused a change in the field trips destination.

correct 2: First, Felicia planned the party; second, decided on decorations; third, invited special guests.

DOL 43

Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club

Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found

correct 1: Do Juan and David's ownership of this sailboat entitle them to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club?

correct 2: The article In Search of Spanish Galleons in the book //Shipwrecks// was written by Kiber and Rotondi, who believes they will be found.

DOL 44

Sentence 1: neither rasheed or larry dont want their teams loss to suggest that team members didnt play good

Sentence 2: mr. Kato explained that because the rule does not effect the entire school but only individual students as a result of that rule the student handbook was checked

correct 1: Neither Rasheed or Larry want their team lose to suggest that team members didn't play well.

correct 2: Mr.Kato explained that because the rule does not effect the entire school, but only individual students; as a result, the student handbook was checked.